26/2/16
The lady in the shadows.
It was a cold stormy night everyone was sleeping except me.I was watching TV then I heard a knock on the door I turned the TV off and went to the door and open the door no one was their.Next I went to turn of the kitchen light off and I just left the living room light on and went upstairs then the light in the living room went off.I went back down to see who turned the light off then I tried to turn the light on but it won’t turn on so I just left the light off.
Next I heard someone whisper my name I looked back and the lighting stroked on the person in the shadows I looked and it was a old lady and she looked very scary there was blood all over her and she was holding a knife.I ran upstairs into my room and I forgot to close the door so I just left the door open then I hid under my bed and waited there for 10 seconds.Then I got up and walk out the door suddenly the door slammed and I looked back the lady was next to my bed.I was shouting for my dad to come because there is a lady holding a knife in my room
After that my dad got out of bed got a baseball bat and ran to my room and tried to open the door but the door didn't open.Then my dad ran pushed the door opened then the lady was going to stab me then my dad jumped then the lady stabbed my dad I was so angry. I walked up with the knife and I dropped the knife because I felt like I was going to turn into a animal I looked into the mirror and my eyes turned red and I said to myself I am a werewolf alpha.I turn to the lady and bit her on the arm and she fell to the ground and disappeared into the dark.I looked back to the floor my dad was gone he wasn't in my room.I heard a noise downstairs it was the TV and the light came back on I went to see if my dad was downstairs but he was not there.When I went upstairs into my parents room my dad was there sleeping.
I like how you described what the lady in the shadow looked like and what she did to make you fell worried and scared.
ReplyDeleteI like your story because it reminded me of when I wrote a narrative writing and I stabbed a lady just like how the lady in the shadow stabbed your dad.
I think it would be helpful if you make sure your sentences make sense by reading it out loud to someone to see if it does make sense.
Excellent work Macky.
I like how you described what the lady in the shadow looked like and what she did to make you fell worried and scared.
ReplyDeleteI like your story because it reminded me of when I wrote a narrative writing and I stabbed a lady just like how the lady in the shadow stabbed your dad.
I think it would be helpful if you make sure your sentences make sense by reading it out loud to someone to see if it does make sense.
Excellent work Macky.
I like how you described what the lady in the shadow looked like and what she did to make you fell worried and scared.
ReplyDeleteI like your story because it reminded me of when I wrote a narrative writing and I stabbed a lady just like how the lady in the shadow stabbed your dad.
I think it would be helpful if you make sure your sentences make sense by reading it out loud to someone to see if it does make sense.
Excellent work Macky.
I like how you described what the lady in the shadow looked like and what she did to make you fell worried and scared.
ReplyDeleteI like your story because it reminded me of when I wrote a narrative writing and I stabbed a lady just like how the lady in the shadow stabbed your dad.
I think it would be helpful if you make sure your sentences make sense by reading it out loud to someone to see if it does make sense.
Excellent work Macky.
I like how you described what the lady in the shadow looked like and what she did to make you fell worried and scared.
ReplyDeleteI like your story because it reminded me of when I wrote a narrative writing and I stabbed a lady just like how the lady in the shadow stabbed your dad.
I think it would be helpful if you make sure your sentences make sense by reading it out loud to someone to see if it does make sense.
Excellent work Macky.
I like how you described what the lady in the shadow looked like and what she did to make you fell worried and scared.
ReplyDeleteI like your story because it reminded me of when I wrote a narrative writing and I stabbed a lady just like how the lady in the shadow stabbed your dad.
I think it would be helpful if you make sure your sentences make sense by reading it out loud to someone to see if it does make sense.
Excellent work Macky.
I like how you described what the lady in the shadow looked like and what she did to make you fell worried and scared.
ReplyDeleteI like your story because it reminded me of when I wrote a narrative writing and I stabbed a lady just like how the lady in the shadow stabbed your dad.
I think it would be helpful if you make sure your sentences make sense by reading it out loud to someone to see if it does make sense.
Excellent work Macky.
I like how you described what the lady in the shadow looked like and what she did to make you fell worried and scared.
ReplyDeleteI like your story because it reminded me of when I wrote a narrative writing and I stabbed a lady just like how the lady in the shadow stabbed your dad.
I think it would be helpful if you make sure your sentences make sense by reading it out loud to someone to see if it does make sense.
Excellent work Macky.
I like how you described what the lady in the shadow looked like and what she did to make you fell worried and scared.
ReplyDeleteI like your story because it reminded me of when I wrote a narrative writing and I stabbed a lady just like how the lady in the shadow stabbed your dad.
I think it would be helpful if you make sure your sentences make sense by reading it out loud to someone to see if it does make sense.
Excellent work Macky.
I like how you described what the lady in the shadow looked like and what she did to make you fell worried and scared.
ReplyDeleteI like your story because it reminded me of when I wrote a narrative writing and I stabbed a lady just like how the lady in the shadow stabbed your dad.
I think it would be helpful if you make sure your sentences make sense by reading it out loud to someone to see if it does make sense.
Excellent work Macky.